For an advertisement? Yeah, I think you did a great job! Very convincing. You didn't try to cram it down our throats, you used your own experience. So yeah, very good for an ad.
But on the actual animation, it could have used some work. Now I know this is just a quick ad but here are some quick flaws I saw:
-Minor echo in the voice acting
-Lip synching quality
-Images from the internet. I'm not a big stickler on these, but some people can't stand them.
But still, not bad at all.
Personally, now I sort of want one.